I am happy to report that the quality of writing is FANTASTIC! For your first entry I have seen beautifully puntuated sentences, strong sense of voice, examples of similies, etc. I am so proud of you guys. Here are a couple of examples:
Signe wrote, “If you have not tasted ice cream before I am sorry but you are missing a bundle of joy. Ice cream is as appetizing as water is to a drought. Ice cream is the cherry on top of a summer day.”
Another interesting point…
“There are many ancient delicacies using ice as a product but the first people to use milk as a product in making ice cream was the Arabs. This fact I truly find interesting since I always thought that America was the first official ice cream makers but I guess not the Arabs created ice cream with either milk or cream, combined with fruits, nuts and finally flavored with rosewater. The history of ice cream spreading to the world is unclear in some areas and I am not sure what to really believe but for example the Chinese say that they were the true inventors of ice cream but others disagree and say that the invention of ice cream came from ancient times.” So who invented ice cream?
A wonderful example of voice is from Farida’s post on “Twihards.”
“The guy went to sleep one night and when he woke up he had found that his girlfriend had bedazzled him so he would sparkle. SHE BEDAZZLED HER BOYFRIEND SO HE WOULD SPARKLE, THAT IS CRAZY!”
Who can tell me what forms of figurative language was used in Emma’s entry? “Nancy was so sweet she was like a big bag of sugar; you could never go wrong with just a little extra sugar. Nancy’s cookies are the sweet memories that are brought back as the yummy smell lingers in the air from the kitchen.”
Leen shows us her passion for sushi in the introduction to her first post.
“Some like Italian food, Arabic food, European food, or American food. I’m of those people that adore, love and worship Sushi!… My passion for Sushi is indescribable. I can’t survive without it, literally! …You are a very lucky person if you also have infatuation for this type of amazing, incredible, mouth watering, delicious, delectable and appetizing food.”
Did you know that Jemima is accident prone? Check out her blog and listen to her voice as she explains about things falling from the sky?
“… our new shutters fell on my head today. I don’t know what it is with me but I just seem to be an accident prone kind of person in the way that something always falls on my head. From bird poop to thick cabinet doors you think of it and its probably hit me on the head sometime or another…”
Nice sentence structure, Lucus. “In the beginning, all horses were wild, like zebras are today.”
Who doesn’t need to know how to hug someone correctly? Annika can help you out. “There are different types of hugs. The first being the awkward just-acquaintances hug. I hate this hug so much. It’s like, really? If you’re going to hug someone, HUG THEM CORRECTLY.”
I have to say that your first entries are wonderful. I cannot wait to see how your entries develop into fine pieces of work. I am looking forward to blog posting #2. Happy Blogging!
Hello, My name is Regina and I teach 8th grade language arts in Doha, Qatar. This blog is designed to encourage my students to become passionate writers. Enjoy their writing!